'Dorsimbra', is a poetry form of three stanzas of four lines each. This form requires three different forms of writing. Stanza One: Sonnet (iambic pentameter rhymed a-b-a-b). Stanza Two: Free verse. Stanza Three: Iambic pentameter blank verse, with the last line being the first line of Stanza One. A challenging one though; I've tried my hand at this for 3WW (Bump, Knuckle, and Transfix) and for Haiku Heights (Flaw). Hope it reads well :)
Appal, the look on her face, commove flares,
Sirens, shrills, shines past the loud bump,
She knuckles the wheel, skins from stares,
Boys in blue pounce, strike a throat lump.
Mam! Get out of your car please! Are you
drunk? They nag and pry! Her blood from
nerves thrust, spills, over fear and
vomitus. Her senses echo and she faints.
Transfixed, her pupils shift; squalls heard,
Crashed mobile chauffeurs corpses down valley,
Gore stains stroke the lane, her soul in tears,
Appal, the look on her face, commove flares.
Haiku Continues This Tale...
Spare flaw behind wheels
Shallow sin; souls end in pain
Rubix events spring
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Such tight ideas! Every word is loaded with sharp dramatic power! A great read!
Very interesting form!
this was an example of excellent craftmanship. scary scene.
whoa both poems have energy - well-written and
the pics. marry well.
truly descriptive heart wrenching scene in both,
Such a compact creation, turns and twists after each two or three words! Amazing!!
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Wow that's truly scary.. very well depicted the emotions.. :)
super creative write.
smiles.
Utterly harrowing, Fiducia.
You have said what I dare not think. Amazing.
This is a new form to me and I think it's perfect for the story you tell, from order to chaos.
I like the haiku, too.
Very intense and very scary. Well done!
Wow, words are amazingly used.. fiducia :)
You blend together a very fine piece to read. The form is challenging. I hope to take it up sometime, Fiducia :) Thank you for sharing!
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